My first Hindi song... hope the Lyrics aren't too amateurish.
Raahi...
Rahi … akela na choro,
Rahi… ab na dil toro,
Raaahiii… Kahan chup gaye hoo..?
Raahi… ab haat na choro.
Akela mai jan raha tha,
Is dagar mein… haan is safar mein..
Tanha thaa… magar betaab na...
Sunsan raah thi…. magar mai pareshan na…
R
Tum kaun thi... mujhe pata na tha,
Pari ho … yaa dil ki kamin ho,
Humrahi Tum ho to…. koi gum na ho..
Kaash yeh safar…. Kabhi khatam na ho..
R
Yeh aandhi…. Yeh toofan kyoon..
Hume huye takrar kyoon…
Yaar gaye tum hume choor kyoon..
Teri raahn dekhoo main ….
R
4 comments:
It was nice. But then it can be better. Leaving out and/or changing a few small words will be of great help and lead to a greater flow.
For eg :
instead of "magar mai pareshan na"
use "magar pareshan na"
or
"Pari ho … yaa dil ki kamin ho"
don't use the last ho and i feel that the song will become more fluid.
:)
true... it has to be edited a bit to make it more fluid..even I found that after reading it again...
:) started writing lyrics too!!! way to go dude..!!
Hey i thought dat u were a maverick in singing.. i guess, u have put on the lyricist's cap with elan..keep it up...keep blogging
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